Comments on: Cut This Scene http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/ More than you ever wanted to hear from Bestselling Author Jenny Crusie. Fri, 10 Feb 2012 07:42:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.4 By: Marta http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-134311 Marta Wed, 14 Oct 2009 05:13:54 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-134311 I needed to know North's occupation upfront. Andie sitting in his 'reception room' forced me to waste attention looking for clues to his job. If I'd known it was an attorney's office Andie was sitting in, the secretary's "He's really very nice" comment would have made perfect sense. But, we don't find out he's an attorney until Andie's crack about letting his mother raise another generation of lawyers. After that, though, the secrectary's comments seemed out of synch. Telling Andie "Mr. North will see you now" means North cued the sec to bring Andie in, so why does the sec say "Miss Martin is here" like he doesn't know? Also, no admin at that level would break in on a conversation between boss and client to ask if they want refreshments. So, I'd cut the secretary out once North's office door opens. While knowing North's an attorney makes the "He's really very nice," comment fit, I'm stumbling over Andie's comments before and after it. They seem a little venemous for the circumstances we're given. I kept waiting for North to reveal his 'not nice' side. When that didn't happen, it put a bit of whiny negative spin on Andie for me. Loved the desk riff. He thinks storage, she thinks symbolism. And, North's mother gnawing down the trees to make it was priceless. The alimony checks work for me, too, as a lingering connection between two people not ready to let go. The picture I got of their marriage was one huge failure to communicate underscored by each believing the other wanted the divorce. The who-called-who exchange didn't work so well for me. I assumed the intent was to show North being controlling and Andie standing firm, but he was so nice it made her seem a little on the petulant side. My only other quibble is with the children. North says Alice had a psychotic episode and hallucinates, and the most he's done is send nannies? I don't buy that, and I don't see Andie buying it. She's a teacher. Why didn't she ask if he'd called in a psychiatrist? That's all the nitpicking I have. I can't believe we have to wait another year to read the whole thing, but I'm glad it's coming out in October. I needed to know North’s occupation upfront. Andie sitting in his ‘reception room’ forced me to waste attention looking for clues to his job. If I’d known it was an attorney’s office Andie was sitting in, the secretary’s “He’s really very nice” comment would have made perfect sense. But, we don’t find out he’s an attorney until Andie’s crack about letting his mother raise another generation of lawyers.

After that, though, the secrectary’s comments seemed out of synch. Telling Andie “Mr. North will see you now” means North cued the sec to bring Andie in, so why does the sec say “Miss Martin is here” like he doesn’t know? Also, no admin at that level would break in on a conversation between boss and client to ask if they want refreshments. So, I’d cut the secretary out once North’s office door opens.

While knowing North’s an attorney makes the “He’s really very nice,” comment fit, I’m stumbling over Andie’s comments before and after it. They seem a little venemous for the circumstances we’re given. I kept waiting for North to reveal his ‘not nice’ side. When that didn’t happen, it put a bit of whiny negative spin on Andie for me.

Loved the desk riff. He thinks storage, she thinks symbolism. And, North’s mother gnawing down the trees to make it was priceless.

The alimony checks work for me, too, as a lingering connection between two people not ready to let go. The picture I got of their marriage was one huge failure to communicate underscored by each believing the other wanted the divorce.

The who-called-who exchange didn’t work so well for me. I assumed the intent was to show North being controlling and Andie standing firm, but he was so nice it made her seem a little on the petulant side.

My only other quibble is with the children. North says Alice had a psychotic episode and hallucinates, and the most he’s done is send nannies? I don’t buy that, and I don’t see Andie buying it. She’s a teacher. Why didn’t she ask if he’d called in a psychiatrist?

That’s all the nitpicking I have. I can’t believe we have to wait another year to read the whole thing, but I’m glad it’s coming out in October.

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]]> By: Sharon Bates http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133922 Sharon Bates Wed, 07 Oct 2009 16:35:00 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133922 I thought of the character North last night and realized this morning that I lived with him! My husband and North are so similar-true "take charge guys". They have no sense of humor and can not think emotionally. Their life is ruled buy lists-get a degree-check, get a job-check, get a house-check, get a wife-check. Once the thing is acquired they move on to the next problem or thing needed.They see a problem, think about a solution and decide to throw either money or people at it -sometimes both. He would not have divorced Ande -agreed to a separation maybe -and would send her money along with typed letters from the secretary asking about her job, state of health,etc. He would never have a thought that someone would want to divorce him-he does every thing RIGHT and on time -his entire life, home and business is planned and "written in stone". Ande has left him for 3 months but she doesn't want a divorce-she wants him to put her at the top of his list-and to think of her as something he can not live with out. Obviously, the separation has not worked so she has come back to try again-she has a plan that involves getting him away from that desk, his office , his demanding family and all those lists. But first, she has to get his attention... I thought of the character North last night and realized this morning that I lived with him! My husband and North are so similar-true “take charge guys”. They have no sense of humor and can not think emotionally. Their life is ruled buy lists-get a degree-check, get a job-check, get a house-check, get a wife-check. Once the thing is acquired they move on to the next problem or thing needed.They see a problem, think about a solution and decide to throw either money or people at it -sometimes both. He would not have divorced Ande -agreed to a separation maybe -and would send her money along with typed letters from the secretary asking about her job, state of health,etc. He would never have a thought that someone would want to divorce him-he does every thing RIGHT and on time -his entire life, home and business is planned and “written in stone”.
Ande has left him for 3 months but she doesn’t want a divorce-she wants him to put her at the top of his list-and to think of her as something he can not live with out. Obviously, the separation has not worked so she has come back to try again-she has a plan that involves getting him away from that desk, his office , his demanding family and all those lists. But first, she has to get his attention…

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]]> By: Sharon Bates http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133897 Sharon Bates Wed, 07 Oct 2009 02:50:15 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133897 the entire idea of these children being in this house after a death and a reporting of ghosts and stra nge happenings is not plausible-the state would be notified SO quickly! Even tho North is busy, he would be required to do his legal duty to these children-and sending down an ex-wife doesn't do the job. Neither of these characters are sounding professional-he is shirking his duty as guardian and she doesn't know what she wants for a job or a husband. The children can not be this bad or no one in their right mind would say ""Yes " to an ex-husbands plea-even with 10 thousand dollars thrown in. The money seems to be a non-issue. If she needed money, why didn't she cash the checks? Why does money seem important now? He sounds like a user of women and she looks weak and fickle. Keep the desk and get rid of the ghosts-no Scoobie-Doo in Crusie Land!! the entire idea of these children being in this house after a death and a reporting of ghosts and stra nge happenings is not plausible-the state would be notified SO quickly! Even tho North is busy, he would be required to do his legal duty to these children-and sending down an ex-wife doesn’t do the job. Neither of these characters are sounding professional-he is shirking his duty as guardian and she doesn’t know what she wants for a job or a husband. The children can not be this bad or no one in their right mind would say “”Yes ” to an ex-husbands plea-even with 10 thousand dollars thrown in. The money seems to be a non-issue. If she needed money, why didn’t she cash the checks? Why does money seem important now? He sounds like a user of women and she looks weak and fickle. Keep the desk and get rid of the ghosts-no Scoobie-Doo in Crusie Land!!

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]]> By: Myra http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133813 Myra Mon, 05 Oct 2009 21:00:08 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133813 same here...I'm half expecting diamond under it ;) same here…I’m half expecting diamond under it ;)

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]]> By: MJ http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133607 MJ Fri, 02 Oct 2009 01:38:03 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133607 Isn't it cool that for many years these people were living only in your head, and now they're thisclose to living in the world? Isn’t it cool that for many years these people were living only in your head, and now they’re thisclose to living in the world?

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]]> By: Cori http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133606 Cori Fri, 02 Oct 2009 01:29:41 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133606 Okay, I feel like a total geek typing this out but I finally figured out what was bugging me about the alimony checks that were never cashed. (I know.. they bother just about everyone on this thread as far as I can tell and you're probably damned tired of hearing about it. Sorry.) Besides my rather mercenary-inability to understand why anyone would fail to take advantage of money that's been (theoretically) duly awarded, there's also the fact that alimony is very much taxable and reported by both sides. If she tells the IRS that she received all of these checks from North and pays the tax on them but never actually cashes them, she's an idiot. And if not, the IRS would have been very unhappy to see North's returns show he's sent all this cash to her over the years without her saying anything to them. (North strikes me as the type to dutifully note the alimony paid on his return.) Okay, I feel like a total geek typing this out but I finally figured out what was bugging me about the alimony checks that were never cashed. (I know.. they bother just about everyone on this thread as far as I can tell and you’re probably damned tired of hearing about it. Sorry.)

Besides my rather mercenary-inability to understand why anyone would fail to take advantage of money that’s been (theoretically) duly awarded, there’s also the fact that alimony is very much taxable and reported by both sides. If she tells the IRS that she received all of these checks from North and pays the tax on them but never actually cashes them, she’s an idiot. And if not, the IRS would have been very unhappy to see North’s returns show he’s sent all this cash to her over the years without her saying anything to them. (North strikes me as the type to dutifully note the alimony paid on his return.)

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]]> By: Carol Anne http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133581 Carol Anne Thu, 01 Oct 2009 17:33:52 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133581 Oh, I like the "weird and twisted form of sending roses to a loved one.... presses/dries them for sentimental reasons" thought. Whatever is decided about the cheques....like the premise of a cheque every month and she saves them. An instructor keeps saying "sometimes you have to kill your little darlings" to keep the story going forward. Perhaps the first chapter has been written/rewritten so many times as there are a few "darlings" and hard to cut from the scene. As many have stated - now, we are invested in two characters who are not finished with each other. Whatever is written will be read and re-read many times. Aren't Jenny's books - re-reads! Last comment on this subject. I'm waiting for the book. You know it will be worth it. Oh, I like the “weird and twisted form of sending roses to a loved one…. presses/dries them for sentimental reasons” thought. Whatever is decided about the cheques….like the premise of a cheque every month and she saves them. An instructor keeps saying “sometimes you have to kill your little darlings” to keep the story going forward. Perhaps the first chapter has been written/rewritten so many times as there are a few “darlings” and hard to cut from the scene. As many have stated – now, we are invested in two characters who are not finished with each other. Whatever is written will be read and re-read many times. Aren’t Jenny’s books – re-reads! Last comment on this subject. I’m waiting for the book. You know it will be worth it.

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]]> By: Victoria http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133571 Victoria Thu, 01 Oct 2009 16:32:57 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133571 To cut words, I'd suggest loosing the secretary and have North be the one to intiate contact with Andie and ask her for her help. Andie would agree to the meeting through simple curiosity. "Tell me why you need my help now. You never did before." I like the uncashed alimony checks but have her bring those along as an "I meant it when I told you and wrote you and had my lawyer tell you not to send them." It gives a nice bit of each not being over the other, even if they think they are. I see the alimony checks as a weird and twisted form of sending roses to a loved one who immediately presses/dries them for sentimental reasons. Then there is the obstinate perverseness of "You didn't need me, and now I don't need you or your money. So there." They may be divorced, but they're not over each other. To cut words, I’d suggest loosing the secretary and have North be the one to intiate contact with Andie and ask her for her help. Andie would agree to the meeting through simple curiosity. “Tell me why you need my help now. You never did before.”

I like the uncashed alimony checks but have her bring those along as an “I meant it when I told you and wrote you and had my lawyer tell you not to send them.” It gives a nice bit of each not being over the other, even if they think they are. I see the alimony checks as a weird and twisted form of sending roses to a loved one who immediately presses/dries them for sentimental reasons. Then there is the obstinate perverseness of “You didn’t need me, and now I don’t need you or your money. So there.”

They may be divorced, but they’re not over each other.

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]]> By: McB http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133548 McB Thu, 01 Oct 2009 02:40:17 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133548 North feels out of his element with the kids. I think he genuinely cares and fears he would just make it worse because he knows he isn't good at that stuff. He knows that what's been tried so far was wrong. He knows this is an unconventional problem which isn't something he understands. But unconventional is right up Andi's alley AND he can help her too. Yes he's managing people but it's what he knows and how he deals. Andi is likeable but a bit flaky. I wonder, though if that isn't rebeling against North's life? I think he knows he needs her but can't be what she wants. And maybe Andi doesn't know what that is. And we are all too involved in the lives of two fictional people we have only met for one chapter. Crusie, sounds like you have another winner. North feels out of his element with the kids. I think he genuinely cares and fears he would just make it worse because he knows he isn’t good at that stuff. He knows that what’s been tried so far was wrong. He knows this is an unconventional problem which isn’t something he understands. But unconventional is right up Andi’s alley AND he can help her too. Yes he’s managing people but it’s what he knows and how he deals.

Andi is likeable but a bit flaky. I wonder, though if that isn’t rebeling against North’s life? I think he knows he needs her but can’t be what she wants. And maybe Andi doesn’t know what that is.

And we are all too involved in the lives of two fictional people
we have only met for one chapter. Crusie, sounds like you have another winner.

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]]> By: D. http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133534 D. Wed, 30 Sep 2009 21:43:31 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133534 Okay, there've been a lot of valid points made and I won't bother to rehash them. I will ask just one small, teensy-tiny, little thing. Would it be out of line if I requested a Crusie heroine who's catch phrase was something different than, "Oh, just hell."? Please? It has a tendency to make them all seem like the same woman to me. Don't get me wrong, I like that woman. I just think it would be nice to get to know another woman. *hangs head at her own presumptuousness* Okay, there’ve been a lot of valid points made and I won’t bother to rehash them. I will ask just one small, teensy-tiny, little thing. Would it be out of line if I requested a Crusie heroine who’s catch phrase was something different than, “Oh, just hell.”? Please? It has a tendency to make them all seem like the same woman to me. Don’t get me wrong, I like that woman. I just think it would be nice to get to know another woman.

*hangs head at her own presumptuousness*

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]]> By: Jade http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133530 Jade Wed, 30 Sep 2009 20:56:00 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133530 Haven't read many of the comments, but will later--working (?) now. My response (on a quick read): I love it. Think it's brilliant. Can't wait for the rest. It does *almost* seem a little long, but it rewards the reader in the end--just in time. So, fabulous! And back to work... Haven’t read many of the comments, but will later–working (?) now. My response (on a quick read):
I love it. Think it’s brilliant. Can’t wait for the rest. It does *almost* seem a little long, but it rewards the reader in the end–just in time. So, fabulous!

And back to work…

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]]> By: inkgrrl http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133527 inkgrrl Wed, 30 Sep 2009 20:16:09 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133527 You've probably already finished the rewrite, but after having read through all the other comments, What Toni Said. You’ve probably already finished the rewrite, but after having read through all the other comments, What Toni Said.

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]]> By: Kathryn http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133516 Kathryn Wed, 30 Sep 2009 17:18:56 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133516 I want to promise I'm not a blatant kiss-ass before I say, "I WANT THIS BOOK.'' I haven't read all of the above comments but I would like to say that without OVER-analysis of 1 scene which is meant to hook interest - and boy did that work - here's what I have gleaned. Andie has come to get some kind of closure. The checks are her vehicle for that. They obviously have very different personality and points of view (The Cinderella Deal) but they came together for some reason at some time. Things obviously fell apart. (Mothers? Welcome to Temptation controlling, dyanasty driven mothers?) And I'm getting the feeling that Andie may like change for change's sake (like me) so it doesn't matter practically that the stuff is good stuff that will last forever, she just wants to see that her presence has made a difference in his life. Which she clearly says when she's like, this is how things were before me and this how they are long after I left. Maybe she thought she could be that change in their earlier relationship, I don't know. But I do know that while it's great to have a independent partner, most people (especially we women) want to feel needed, and if she didn't feel that before, she may not be able to resist (obviously wan't able to resist) it now. I do think it's scary that the kids appear to be troubled and a woman died. That would make me pause for more info before I agreed and I'd definitely be taking someone with me. (Is there a big protective dog or brother like Davey?) :) Anwyay, I can't wait. And as someone who is sensitive to criticism, may I just say that you have XL balls of steel for putting this on here and then reading the comments. Whoa. I'd be scheduling treatment. I want to promise I’m not a blatant kiss-ass before I say, “I WANT THIS BOOK.” I haven’t read all of the above comments but I would like to say that without OVER-analysis of 1 scene which is meant to hook interest – and boy did that work – here’s what I have gleaned.
Andie has come to get some kind of closure. The checks are her vehicle for that. They obviously have very different personality and points of view (The Cinderella Deal) but they came together for some reason at some time. Things obviously fell apart. (Mothers? Welcome to Temptation controlling, dyanasty driven mothers?) And I’m getting the feeling that Andie may like change for change’s sake (like me) so it doesn’t matter practically that the stuff is good stuff that will last forever, she just wants to see that her presence has made a difference in his life. Which she clearly says when she’s like, this is how things were before me and this how they are long after I left. Maybe she thought she could be that change in their earlier relationship, I don’t know. But I do know that while it’s great to have a independent partner, most people (especially we women) want to feel needed, and if she didn’t feel that before, she may not be able to resist (obviously wan’t able to resist) it now.
I do think it’s scary that the kids appear to be troubled and a woman died. That would make me pause for more info before I agreed and I’d definitely be taking someone with me. (Is there a big protective dog or brother like Davey?) :) Anwyay, I can’t wait. And as someone who is sensitive to criticism, may I just say that you have XL balls of steel for putting this on here and then reading the comments. Whoa. I’d be scheduling treatment.

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]]> By: McB http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133515 McB Wed, 30 Sep 2009 17:07:35 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133515 I like North. Yeah, he comes cross as a little stuffy and socially awkward, but it's endearing. The stuffiness is probably a defense mechanism against having to take care of everyone else. I think he's probably been trying to take care of Andi, too, because that's how he shows he cares. It reminds me of Shane taking care of Anges' "to do" list. So I like North. I like North. Yeah, he comes cross as a little stuffy and socially awkward, but it’s endearing. The stuffiness is probably a defense mechanism against having to take care of everyone else. I think he’s probably been trying to take care of Andi, too, because that’s how he shows he cares. It reminds me of Shane taking care of Anges’ “to do” list. So I like North.

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]]> By: Jo Walton http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133506 Jo Walton Wed, 30 Sep 2009 14:24:35 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133506 She comes over well. He comes over well. The desk is brilliant. The thing that seems off to me is her agreeing. The only bit where I was at a distance and thinking "well, I suppose it needs this to get the plot started" was with the total implausibility of the situation with the kids. If it needs editing, it's around that. The emotional pitch is fine, but there's something there on the "what universe is this" with reference to the kids and the job and their level of reality compared to the absolute reality of the couch and the desk and the returned alimony. Writer, reader, fan, giver of feedback, could also send brownies. She comes over well. He comes over well. The desk is brilliant. The thing that seems off to me is her agreeing. The only bit where I was at a distance and thinking “well, I suppose it needs this to get the plot started” was with the total implausibility of the situation with the kids. If it needs editing, it’s around that. The emotional pitch is fine, but there’s something there on the “what universe is this” with reference to the kids and the job and their level of reality compared to the absolute reality of the couch and the desk and the returned alimony.

Writer, reader, fan, giver of feedback, could also send brownies.

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]]> By: Sheri http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133483 Sheri Wed, 30 Sep 2009 04:35:42 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133483 If North writes her a check every month for ten years and she doesn't cash them, wouldn't he know that? I mean, they never clear the bank. I think he would have addressed that issue a long time ago--he is a lawyer, and they like to dot their "i's" and cross their "t's" so it's not likely that this little fact would have passed him by. If you like that whole thing (her trying to be independent and all--I like the part that getting acheck from him every month is a reminder that they were once married and she wants to get rid of that reminder) then I would suggest that North is the one that calls the meeting, ostensibly to discuss the fact that she has never cashed a check from him but in reality it's so he can get her to go to the house and take care of the kids for him. I didn't get into the whole story until she was in the office with him. Don't care about the outer office or the secretary--not necessary to the story. Need to jump into it a little quicker. Someone else said to start with "Mr. Archer will see you now." Yeah, that works better. And Kathleen's idea of a trust--that sounds more like something North would do. I love that idea. and yes, she would have to confront him to get rid of it so she can start her new life without any strings attached. Can't fall back on North and his money if this relationship fails also. North needs to have a little more personality. Why did she fall in love with him? because he has blue eyes? She's a teacher--obviously a caring sort of person. He seems very cold and restrained and I find it difficult seeing him as a sympathetic character. I would rather she ran off with her new boyfriend and they abscomb with the children and go and live in Peru as llama herders than end up with North. Even his name is cold--"North" sounds like the North Pole, the Artic Circle, snow, ice... I love Andi's name, however--Andromeda--"snort". Great name! Ok, going back into lurkdom. If North writes her a check every month for ten years and she doesn’t cash them, wouldn’t he know that? I mean, they never clear the bank. I think he would have addressed that issue a long time ago–he is a lawyer, and they like to dot their “i’s” and cross their “t’s” so it’s not likely that this little fact would have passed him by. If you like that whole thing (her trying to be independent and all–I like the part that getting acheck from him every month is a reminder that they were once married and she wants to get rid of that reminder) then I would suggest that North is the one that calls the meeting, ostensibly to discuss the fact that she has never cashed a check from him but in reality it’s so he can get her to go to the house and take care of the kids for him.

I didn’t get into the whole story until she was in the office with him. Don’t care about the outer office or the secretary–not necessary to the story. Need to jump into it a little quicker. Someone else said to start with “Mr. Archer will see you now.” Yeah, that works better. And Kathleen’s idea of a trust–that sounds more like something North would do. I love that idea. and yes, she would have to confront him to get rid of it so she can start her new life without any strings attached. Can’t fall back on North and his money if this relationship fails also.

North needs to have a little more personality. Why did she fall in love with him? because he has blue eyes? She’s a teacher–obviously a caring sort of person. He seems very cold and restrained and I find it difficult seeing him as a sympathetic character. I would rather she ran off with her new boyfriend and they abscomb with the children and go and live in Peru as llama herders than end up with North. Even his name is cold–”North” sounds like the North Pole, the Artic Circle, snow, ice… I love Andi’s name, however–Andromeda–”snort”. Great name!

Ok, going back into lurkdom.

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]]> By: ruthie http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133477 ruthie Wed, 30 Sep 2009 03:27:47 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133477 Well, it all seems good to me. I like North. Andie is vintage Crusie, which is great. Without knowing what you think is unnecessary, I can't see anything extraneous. Yeah, I could cut it, if I had to, but I'm-a like. Well, it all seems good to me. I like North. Andie is vintage Crusie, which is great. Without knowing what you think is unnecessary, I can’t see anything extraneous. Yeah, I could cut it, if I had to, but I’m-a like.

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]]> By: Jill http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133473 Jill Wed, 30 Sep 2009 00:59:45 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133473 I liked the thing about the checks and about the checks being their form of communication-at least from Andie's pov. The paragraph starting with "North sat behind a massive desk" is all of 2 sentences long. Cut it. And the detailed description of the office-not necessary. Other than that it is totally gush worthy. I liked the thing about the checks and about the checks being their form of communication-at least from Andie’s pov. The paragraph starting with “North sat behind a massive desk” is all of 2 sentences long. Cut it. And the detailed description of the office-not necessary.

Other than that it is totally gush worthy.

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]]> By: Kathleen http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133469 Kathleen Wed, 30 Sep 2009 00:11:37 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133469 This says it for me too. I wondered why he asked her when she doesn't seem particularly inclined to be intuitive. This says it for me too. I wondered why he asked her when she doesn’t seem particularly inclined to be intuitive.

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]]> By: Carol http://www.arghink.com/2009/09/26/cut-this-scene/#comment-133455 Carol Tue, 29 Sep 2009 20:16:23 +0000 http://www.arghink.com/?p=1742#comment-133455 $120K is big bucks for a nanny anyplace. I know several millionaires here in LA who pay their nannies more like $80k (bitching the entire time, mind you!). $120K is big bucks for a nanny anyplace. I know several millionaires here in LA who pay their nannies more like $80k (bitching the entire time, mind you!).

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